Dreaming Spires Revision

Please, please, please, please, please ... Are you listening???  Good. I'm going to say this just one more time. So even if the exam task for descriptive writing asks you to include thoughts and feelings, it doesn't mean to digress into interior monologue about how you felt about something, about your thoughts, your flashbacks, your back story, what you hope to find in the future. In order to REVEAL your thoughts and feelings in a DESCRIPTION, you overlay value to the objects you choose to focus on, you add atmosphere to the moment. How about an example? A long time ago, there was a descriptive task about being on a cable car that suddenly stopped. Here's how you DON"T show your thoughts and feelings for a description: We were stuck sky-high on a cable car and I was hoping that someone would come get us soon. My phone's battery was dead, though, and the lady next to me seemed to be about a hundred-thousand years